Ben was a tall shy boy with wild black hair. One day Ben was captured by the dragon whisperer to feed to the big, red, scaly dragon. He started to kick his captors as they took him to a huge stone castle. “Now I’m going to die” he said as he peered at the dragon which was sitting in murky water. The water had a dark steely glow like it wanted to swallow you up. The dragon fixed its tiny eyes on Ben. As he took a nervous step backwards, the dragon slowly opened its mouth to reveal teeth like daggers……..

6 responses »

  1. Aiden says:

    Great story Tilly I can picture poor Ben.

  2. stephanie M says:

    I wonder if Ben lives?

  3. Max Spencer says:

    Love AA sentences Tilly well done!

  4. Arabella says:

    Tilly whats going to happen next?

  5. Hattie says:

    Amazing description Tilly

  6. m1ssp says:

    Wow Tilly, your writing immediately hooked me in with your description and action. You have used some excellent expanded noun phrases to really help the reader use their imagination to see what this strange place is like. I also like the way that you have only used a tiny bit of speech – just enough to give more information but not too much to lose sense of the plot.
    Well done.
    Miss P 🙂

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