The cave stayed as still as stone. In the magic water there lay a dragon with the smoothest scales you have ever seen and a long golden tail like gold. A tiny brown dot lay on top of the beautiful dragon. This dot was a boy. Dexter, he was called. ‘Ha Eleanor’, Dexter whispered to the dragon. ‘Yeah I know everybody hates us and now we’re stuck here’, Eleanor answered back.’ I know it’s tough but we’ll manage’, said determined Dexter. Bang Bang . ‘Llllook behind you Dexxxtttteerr’, Eleanor whispered in a terrified voice. Dexter spun round. Evilness had risen.

 

6 responses »

  1. Tegan says:

    That is amazing I could never do better with all that description.You should write books!!!

  2. m1ssp says:

    Wow Sophia – I love this! You have very skilfully set the mood of your story with your vocabulary choices. I also love how you introduce the boy Dexter as a tiny black dot!
    Great use of speech too.
    Very well done!
    Miss P 🙂

  3. Max Spencer says:

    Love your cliff hanger Sophia well done!

  4. Aiden says:

    Dexter thought positive. I could not think positive in a situation like that.

  5. Maja says:

    WOW!!!!!!!!! I absolutely love your choice of words.:)

  6. Hattie says:

    Good similes sophia

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