The Midnight Steal

There once was a boy named David, he lived in a golden castle. The castle held a deep secret, it had a maze, but nobody knew that the maze was a dragon where his head hid a treasure chest.ย  The treasure chest hid a magical golden key that led David to his secret chamber.

One night he woke to the noise of someone blowing up the gate to the castle, David snuck downstairs to see a man going towards to the maze. David tried to stop him in his tracks but the dragon woke upโ€ฆ..To be continued

5 responses »

  1. m1ssp says:

    I love how you have carefully organised you paragraphs Jack. My favourite line is ‘The castle held a deep secret…’ Definitely made me want to read on!
    Well done (good use of ellipsis too at the end!)
    Miss P ๐Ÿ™‚

  2. Max Spencer says:

    Love how you put in all those descriptive words Jack well done!

  3. Aiden says:

    It was cool because you left it with a to be continued.

  4. Henry says:

    What happens next Jack?

  5. Sophia H says:

    Amazing cliffhanger!!!!

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